Review on cheehou WA2

The introduction has started off smoothly and the thesis statement has stated clearly the main topic for the essay which is on Supercritical-water-cooled reactors (SCWR).

In the second paragraph, the sentence structure for the following two sentences "Having those new features in place..." and "Having learnt from the previous accidents..." can be changed to link the two sentence more smoothly.

Also for the second paragraph, the paragraph structure is argument-counter-rebuttal-argument-counter-rebuttal. I suggest the two points which is on safety for operation and safety due the misuse of nuclear for production of nuclear weapon to be seperated into two paragraph.

Overall, there is a good usage of transitional phrase to link up the whole essay. Lastly, there is few grammatical error in the essay.

Summary of the article "A Force to Fight Global Warming"

An intact ecosystem plays an important part in retarding the build-up of atmospheric greenhouse gases. There are two reasons for tackling climate change by natural ecosystem. Firstly, natural ecosystem controls carbon and global biochemical cycles. Secondly, it is due practicality as it is the cheapest, safest and easiest solution.

Natural ecosystem not only helps in tackling climate change, but also it benefits human in two main ways. Firstly, it can saves live and sustain livelihoods. Secondly, it is due to the untapped potential of the natural ecosystem and biodiversity.

The governments need to find ways to monitor natural and modified ecosystems for true net emission. They also also need to find ways to value and market the other climate services that natural habitats provide. There might be corruption from the carbon market as many have suggested.

Review on cheehou WA1

The thesis sentence stated the natural ecosystem conserve the exploited potential followed by ecosystem system could assist in saving lives and sustaining livelihood. The exploited potential is explained in paragraph 4 and ecosystem saves life and sustaining livelihood is explained in paragraph 2 and 3. I suggest exploited potential to be explained in paragraph 2 and ecosystem saves life and sustaining livelihood is explained in paragraph 3 and 4 instead.

There is also problem with sentence structure for the thesis statement. The use of semi colon should be "independent clause; conjunctive adverb or transition phrase, independent clause".

The in-text citation (Coral reefs and mangroves act as natural barriers against tsunamis, para. 13) does not have the year.

About me

Hi everyone, I am Joshua and this is my first time writing a blog entry. Basically, I am a friendly, cheerful and easy-going person. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic with a Diploma in Mechanical Engineering. After my graduation from polytechnic, I served the nation as an air force technican in Paya Lebar air base. My task as an air force technician is to maintain the serviceability of the aircraft arrestor system and airfield lighting. Throughout my two years of national service, I have enjoyed it and learned a lot of technical skill from my superiors.

As for my hobbies and interest, I am a soccer fanatic and used to play soccer almost everyday in the past. I have been a loyal Manchester United fan since 10. I also like to play table-tennis and used to be in the school team during my secondary school days. I also enjoy fishing and through fishing, it has trained me to be a more patient person.