The thesis sentence stated the natural ecosystem conserve the exploited potential followed by ecosystem system could assist in saving lives and sustaining livelihood. The exploited potential is explained in paragraph 4 and ecosystem saves life and sustaining livelihood is explained in paragraph 2 and 3. I suggest exploited potential to be explained in paragraph 2 and ecosystem saves life and sustaining livelihood is explained in paragraph 3 and 4 instead.
There is also problem with sentence structure for the thesis statement. The use of semi colon should be "independent clause; conjunctive adverb or transition phrase, independent clause".
The in-text citation (Coral reefs and mangroves act as natural barriers against tsunamis, para. 13) does not have the year.
Thursday, February 25, 2010
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